you n i
running through a green field, the image flickers, an illusion, a lie, the balloon burstsi reach to touch you, you turn away, watching the passing sea, we chat of innocuous nothings
potential partner in disguise, wearing a past, too hard to let go off, i seek me in your eyes, and meet an empty eyebrow
we struggle to jive, through mismatched moves, bad choreography, little brings us together, more keeps us apart
the dream soured, someone took away the missing pieces, either you or i, gave up, went under
yet we keep looking, for the lost love, seeing only the differences, i remain unreal, you stay stuck in your mind
part of a wistful future, remembering broken wishes, and the never-ever, you and i
posted by goldfluke @ 9:01 PM
5 Comments:
wow! u get awesome-er every post
realizing the thematic significance of this blog..
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a clever post
keeps them all guessing!
nicely written (since this couldn't be about you, since its always about the writing, not the writer).
it doesn't evoke any emotion in me though becuase your writing assumes that the reader will connect with the protagonists or the situation automatically
but u have explained neither. And with an overtly cryptic style of writing there is further detachment from the pain that simpler prose could evoke.
passing sea?
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